Life is full of contradictions. For me it represents the coin, which has two absolutely different, independent and at the same time interrelated sides. But life is even more than alternative, it gives a wide range of possible realities. This statement also refers to such concept as marriage.
My Grandmother often says that if she had had the second life she would have not married not at any price. Almost all people imagine marriage as an endless happiness but the time passes and couples burden with variety of pursuits and duties. What inferences should we make from this? Without hesitation, it is stupid to hide behind the wall of alienation, people used to communicate and fall in love. What should we do is to work on good relations, we should support and treat love as sensitively as a delicate flower.
Married life is based on relations and feelings that preceded the years of living together. But moreover it depends on what people will further do, when they exchange wedding rings and face all the problems of routine life.
Marriage is neither an endless happiness nor lifelong burden for me, it is the work of two souls that eventually found one another but sometimes do not know what to do with each other. They love and feel hurt, quarrel and reconcile. But if couple strive for love, they’ll have a lifelong happiness.
I liked your essay very much, I think it is well organized and well developed. The introduction of the essay introduces the statement; it reveals your opinion of the theme and briefly outlines concepts that lead you to develop the arguments in the body of your essay. The information that supports your position is presented in the body of the essay. Your arguments are obvious, that was very good. I liked that you used facts and examples from your life that explained your point of view. The conclusion summarized the arguments and the statement of the essay. The result is a complete understanding of your position to the marriage.
ReplyDeleteYour writing had a simple manner; you were using only necessary words, which might not confuse readers.
There were no serious errors in a sentence structure or usage.
The most frequent error was the incorrect usage of articles.
You should use the form of Past Subjunctive in the sentence: “My Grandmother often says that if she had had a second life, she would never get have not married, not at any price.
It is better to say “never get married” instead of “have not married”. Get married is less formal and more commonly used than marry. And it is better to use “not at any price” as detachment, so you have to separate this set-phrase with coma.
Be attentive with the usage of such structures as “as...as”. It is better to say “…we should support and treat love as sensitively as we treat a delicate flower”.
I'll send you possible variant, please, read it and correct. Well done!
Life is full of contradictions. For me it represents a coin, which has two absolutely different, independent and at the same time interrelated sides. But life is even more than an alternative, it gives a wide range of possible realities. This statement also refers to such a concept as marriage.
ReplyDeleteMy Grandmother often says that if she had a second life, she would never get married, not at any price. Almost all people imagine marriage as an endless happiness but the time passes and couples burden with variety of pursuits and duties. What inferences should we make from this? Without hesitation, it is stupid to hide behind the wall of alienation, people used to communicate and fall in love. What should we do is to work on good relations, we should support and treat love as sensitively as we treat a delicate flower.
Married life is based on relations and feelings that proceeded the years of living together. But moreover it depends on what people will further do, when they exchange wedding rings and face all the problems of routine life.
Marriage is neither an endless happiness nor a lifelong burden for me, it is the work of two souls that eventually found one another but sometimes do not know what to do with each other. They love and feel hurt, quarrel and reconcile. But if a couple strives for love, it’ll have a lifelong happiness.
I can't still understand, if you meant many couples or just one..in the sentence "But if couple strive for love, they’ll have a lifelong happiness". Some variants are possible here: "a couple strives", "the couple strives" or "couples strive".
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